I liked how you started off with a fact as the beginning. I did think it included a lot of other people’s work, meaning the articles and many quotes. I feel you should express yourself more and what it means to you. I did notice how you included if you agreed or not, which is fine but maybe saying you agree and then adding why in the same sentence. Another thing was I would include self metaphors and explain off of that and your perspective of what metaphors should and shouldn’t look like, instead of going off the authors. I liked how you included many quotes and the authors work but I would write it as the reader of your essay has never read the articles. I noticed how you said “I agree with this fact after reading his example about an orchid and a dandelion metaphor”. Overall I feel you had a good starting point.
You are off to a good start as you consistently engage your peer’s work. Well done. As you continue to improve, look for the opportunity to use details. For example, in your 150-word note, you write, ” I feel you should express yourself more and what it means to you.” What do you mean by “it”? How could your reader better express “it”? Don’t be afraid to offer more constructive criticism in the margins. Your opinion is important and can help!